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Collaboration Artwork 02: An evening in Ideas

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A collaboration artwork from myself and Zhun Rs. Props to him for a wonderful artline work.
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© 2016 - 2024 Saizo-san
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:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
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:star::star::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
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Very nice lighting and generally how the shadows cast.
I like that you put your other artwork as an artwork in this.
It's fun to notice.
I also like the hues of the skies outside and how it was coloured.

I'll just talk about the colours since you coloured it.

Some things:
The colours are all too equally saturated, it's hard to focus.
I see some blobs of green, blue, red, --all wanting to grab attention.
I would think that maybe the books should be a little yellower than the rest of the picture since it's closer to the light.
The shadows on her clothes are blurry compared to the shadow that is on the wall, which makes this feel strange because it would seem that she is the focus.
In fact, because of the sharpness of that wall area thing (with the artwork hung), that was the first thing I looked at.
Not sure if that was the intention?
Try using different softness/hardness of brushes, make it more varied.
Another thing is that I notice you like to make every element in the picture "too perfect" and precise in terms of shading.
This makes everything in the picture "too tight" and can be somewhat uncomfortable to view.
Yes, some parts need to be more precise, others, more loose, simplified and lesser contrast.
It's like how we see things in reality, we don't see every contrasting shadow 100%. Only what we look at is more detailed and contrast.
Also, colour changes can help to make things more balanced. Yellowish light, bluish shadow, rather than just using the darker tone of the base colour.

That's all~